Monday, August 16, 2010
This all sounds like Abby toyed with Abby’s nipples
Gotta watch the “her” and “she’s” when writing sex scenes with two women.
Didn’t Melina get a Brazilian for him?
Your womb is your uterus…I’m thinking it’s her vagina that is?
If she’s kissing his nipples, she wouldn’t really be lying on his chest, but leaning over him.
Is he wearing a condom?
If she’s on her tummy, how can any arousal be trailing to her anus? Wouldn’t that be going against gravity?
Just checking… deliberately no condom this time, or did he just forget?
The way this is phrased, it’s not clear whether it’s her mouth or his cock that’s “hot and velvet, hard and pulsing”
Dangler – reads as though she is hot, hard and throbbing
If she’s on the bottom, why would she need to lift her head?
This reads as if her neck is sitting beside her on his couch.
Um…no lube? She’s an anal virgin and he knows it.
Since you just used “womb” about what about “pussy” or “cunt”?
What about cross contamination. As a doc, he’d know not to put his mouth on her again after it has been on/in her anus.
Did it (his cock) soften from beforehand?
Is this anal or vaginal?